WALT: describe the setting of a story using ‘show’ not ‘tell’
SC:
- to use descriptive language to help the reader visualise the setting
- to use language that activates the readers’ senses e.g smell and sound (Some)
- to use similes and metaphors to describe the setting
- to use interesting vocab to describe the setting
“It’s a good day… To die hard!”
“Do they always play trailers?”
“I haven’t seen the screens playing anything else.”
“Don’t the staff get bored of them?”
“Why are you asking me?”
“I don’t no. We better pick a movie, my mum’s waiting.”
As the two boys are talking, an armed wrestler walks in and starts stuffing movies into his bag. “What do you think you're doing.” said the man at the counter. “I’m taking these movies, you got a problem."
“Yeah!” Suddenly the man at the counter pulls out a shotgun. The boys ran out from the sound of a Pop! Pop! Pop! The boys found the man at the counter lying on the floor and the wrestler hold a semi auto machine gun...
Comments:
You are at the video store
I think you should have used more interesting words and also you didn’t put all of your senses.
